Feedback on Textual Analysis Presentations

Name	Film Language (Micro - Macro)	Analysis of Macro	Personal Argument	Comments
Jasmine (Level 3)	Highlighted examples clearly. Described each scene. Level 2	Makes reference to deeper meaning of characters. Includes messages about characters e.g. Mothers. The messages link from each key scene provided. Level 3	Clear Thesis Statement.  Links back to the points made, throughout the presentation. Could also look at other narrative aspects to reinforce analysis of characters.  Conclusion answers the Personal Argument. Level 3	Uses information on slides to expand on points.  Large focus on characters which is a good link to narrative. Could explain the plot of both films more, for the audience to achieve a better understanding.
Megan (Level 3)	Explores the micro and macro showing links through key scenes. Use of advanced film terminology. Level 3	Good understanding on macro points. Leads from Mise-en-scene, highlighting alternative interpretation towards masculinity. Level 4	Clear meaning on personal argument. Messages and Values might be easier to condense points. Level 3	Clear plot understanding. Might be good to summarise the personal argument more in the conclusion.
Cara (Level 3)	highlights Misc-en-scene micro aspect. Includes clear layout towards the PEAS structure. Level 3	Representation through characters is detailed. Level 3	Good direct Thesis Statement. For more variety, could link to the sci-fi  aspect of both films. Level 2	Clear structure to Textual Analysis points. Clear comparison of the two films. Youth resolution can be added as another point or add on.
Ben (Level 3)	Good use of key scenes to communicate micro aspects. Good use of terminology. Level 3	Provided alternative interpretations. Explanation of genre can link to zombie and undead concepts. Level 3	Clear explanation towards the horror genre. good contextual information. Level 2	Good understanding of resolutions.  Could include more information linked with expectations of a horror and the narrative structure in accordance with vampires.
Grace (Level 3)	Use of micro and macro terminology. use of PEAS structure. Level 3	Good link to mise-en-scene.  Representation of gangsters and antagonists is clear. Clear key scenarios. Level 3	Clear Thesis Statement in accordance with representation and narrative.  Answers the personal argument. Level 3	Good historical context in thesis statement.  Some conclusive points from the personal argument. Could look more into micro features for each key scene.
Martin (Level 3)	Strong detection of Micro aspects. Level 2	Reference to youth through representation. Understanding of key scenes by using skills. Level 3	Clear understanding of the difference of youth. Level 3	Describes the plot of both films for easier understanding for the audience. Could be more specific about key scenes, and the links from micro to macro could be more direct.
Peter (Level 3)	Description of both films. use of narrative character roles. highlights mise-en-scene as a main micro aspect.  Level 2	Analysis of micro aspects to show symbolism of father figure is a good in depth analysis. Level 3	Clear personal argument.  Description and analysis of heroes. good conclusion of heroes e.g. Damaged characters. Level 3	Some comparison to each film.  Could talk more in depth about narrative character roles and the heroes rebirth.
Ollie (level 3)	Shows understanding of narrative. Use of mise-en-scene to lead into micro aspect. direct analysis. Level 3	Strong link to characters about narrative.  analysis of all key scenes provided in presentation. Level 2	Clear in showing the contrast of the films.  Could speak about generic narrative character roles. Level 3	Descriptive about story lines.  Can link to Peter’s study by talking about the heroes rebirth. Could include more genre details (horror and humour aspects).
David (Level 3)	Reference to mise-en-scene and cinematography. Follows essay structure. Level 2	States how the macro is conveyed through key scenes in both films. Level 3	Protagonist development included within Thesis Statement.  Reference to antagonists and the restoring of equilibrium. Level 3	Could link to narrative character roles.  The key scenes could have a larger focus towards Harry Brown as a character. Could make reference to the symbology behind Harry Brown walking through the tunnel at the end.
Alex (Level 3)	Direct in highlighting micro and macro. Shows how the use of editing and mise-en-scene is used. Level 3	Analysis of micro aspects in key scenes. Level 3	Shows how they break the narrative of stereotypical horrors.  Could talk more in detail about the change in horror conventions and genre. Level 2	Describes both films.  Expand to the genre aspect, highlighting how Scream has changed conventional character roles. Can talk about the use of gore and how the use of film stars help drive scream as a successful film. When in comparison to Paranormal Activity which was cheap to make.
Becky (Level 3)	Highlights editing techniques.  Use of sounds as a micro aspect. Level 3	Use of characters in a relationship to reflect stereotypical roles of men and women,  Selected appropriate key scenes for analysis to communicate points being made. Level 3	Representation  of women is clear.  Character’s journeys which highlight independence. Level 2	Good contrast of roles. Could use more mise-en-scene as a micro aspect in highlighting costume e.g. Hippy appearance in One Day. Could link to overall gender representation as a personal argument, not just women.